Talk:Myths Transformed: Difference between revisions
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Latest comment: 30 May 2015 by Mith
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What do you want me to do? [[User:Woolly Mammoth|Woolly Mammoth]] 02:40, 30 May 2015 (UTC) | What do you want me to do? [[User:Woolly Mammoth|Woolly Mammoth]] 02:40, 30 May 2015 (UTC) | ||
:I don't want you to do anything. But what needs doing to this article is that it needs to be phrased, structured and worded in an encyclopaedia format. I have removed some of your personal musings already, but some specific things that need tidying with the article include: | |||
:#Usage of the first person throughout - "us" in particular; | |||
:#Analysis - there are elements in here which are your personal analysis. Although everyone may agree with you it needs either removing or referencing a reputable source who has analysed this. References to "significance" are examples of this; | |||
:#It could do with specific references (such as when compared to later versions of the legendarium, such as on the origin of orcs); | |||
:#There are specific issues with the tone which do not convey the level of professionalism we'd like to see: the use of "literally" and "..." | |||
:Does that make sense? --{{User:Mith/sig}} 10:11, 30 May 2015 (UTC) | |||
Latest revision as of 10:11, 30 May 2015
What do you want me to do? Woolly Mammoth 02:40, 30 May 2015 (UTC)
- I don't want you to do anything. But what needs doing to this article is that it needs to be phrased, structured and worded in an encyclopaedia format. I have removed some of your personal musings already, but some specific things that need tidying with the article include:
- Usage of the first person throughout - "us" in particular;
- Analysis - there are elements in here which are your personal analysis. Although everyone may agree with you it needs either removing or referencing a reputable source who has analysed this. References to "significance" are examples of this;
- It could do with specific references (such as when compared to later versions of the legendarium, such as on the origin of orcs);
- There are specific issues with the tone which do not convey the level of professionalism we'd like to see: the use of "literally" and "..."
